DrA3.1INF+rough+draft

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Studentwriter Dr. Archibald English 110.5## 3.1 INF rough draft 29 Oct. 2008

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Many people. . .your introduction is well written but you might. . . point 1 point 2 point 3 conclusion

Dr. A's feedback for Sara G's 3.1INF:
 * **What is the thesis?** Type out the thesis you find in the paper in your own words; it will help you see whether the writer's main insight is made sufficiently clear.


 * **How is the essay organized?** Describe in three or four sentences how the essay is organized. This will help you determine if the structure was clear.


 * **Was the organization logical?** Was this the best way the writer could present their information?
 * **Were any parts not relevant to the thesis?** As a reader did you pause to wonder how a statement or paragraph was related to the thesis?
 * **What examples and types of evidence were most convincing?** Did the essay engage your emotions and appeal to your experiences in appropriate ways?
 * **What two places could use more development?** Which places in the text need more evidence, examples, explanation.
 * **Did the introduction catch your attention?** The writer was probably writing about a topic that already interests them, so did they communicate that interest to you?